Sophie's narrative

Sophie shared a story she wrote at home that was inspired by a story her younger sister was reading.  Share your 2 stars and 1 wish for Sophie in the comment section.

Liam's Family Holiday

On Saturday after rugby we went to Omarama and stayed in a motel.  The next day we went to Queenstown for Nana DiDi's birthday, she was turning 70. My cousins came from Dunedin and Sydney, all together there was 14 people.  We went skiing at Remarkables Ski field it was fun, I went on the chairlift with Tom and Dad.  On the first day I went on the sugar bowl.  On Thursday we went on the gondola and luge with all the family, I raced Tom, Dad and Zach.  On Friday we all went out for dinner at the Lonestar for Nana DiDi's birthday and on Sunday we came home to West Melton.  It was great to get home and see Bruno and Ella, as we had really missed them both.

By Liam Parker
13th July 2014

Brody's Awesome Auckland Adventure

Brody shared his journal (not a diary) of his time in Auckland. Brody moved down from Auckland at the beginning of the year, so he doesn't get to see his family all the time.

Brody's writing style reminds me of how Tim Gates writes, what do you think?

Give Brody 2 stars and 1 wish for his writing?

Liam's Story

After Liam's rugby game he went home and wrote about it then he shared his writing with us.  We gave him 2 stars (what we liked) and 1 wish (1 thing Liam could include or leave out in his next piece of writing).

What 2 stars would you give Liam about this recount?
What 1 wish would you give to Liam?

Leave your 2 stars and 1 wish in a comment below.