Tuesday, 17 June 2014

Liam's Story

After Liam's rugby game he went home and wrote about it then he shared his writing with us.  We gave him 2 stars (what we liked) and 1 wish (1 thing Liam could include or leave out in his next piece of writing).

What 2 stars would you give Liam about this recount?
What 1 wish would you give to Liam?

Leave your 2 stars and 1 wish in a comment below.



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  1. Anonymous29 June 2014 at 03:17

    Liam, I like how you ... have used an introduction (who, when, where) and you have had a go at using speech marks :-)
    Liam, in your next piece of writing try and include a HOOK at the beginning like SCORE! Or, I quickly side stepped my opposition.
    Thanks for sharing your recount with us
    Mrs P

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